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Startling Statement
Although the KPOP industry is filled with faces of talent and smiles, it may not always be that way. SM entertainment has caused several reasons for many to believe that the life of idols under the label are filled with hardships and mistreatment.

Compare/Contrast
Many KPOP idol groups have acknowledged their entertainment company, grateful for their opportunity. However, there have recently been new acknowledgments made by these idol groups of their respective companies. Recently idol groups have been suing their respective companies.

Rhetorical Question
These days all the idol groups have been happy and content showing off bright smiles. However, many have looked tired and worn out. Could it be that they are being over worked? Or are they hiding more? What are their respective companies doing about this?

(7) Comments

  1. Vinyl Staff On February 8, 2011 at 11:12 AM

    Favourite is probably the first, though I think a more direct example could make it more effective. Can't wait to read the article, though ^__^

    ~ IBI

     
    Vinyl Staff On February 8, 2011 at 11:15 AM

    I like the last one the most, though it took me a while to figure out what KPOP was.
    - EJE

     
    Vinyl Staff On February 8, 2011 at 11:20 AM

    I prefer the first, but maybe you could slip in a description of KPOP ensure the reader knows what you're writing about.

    ~OMO

     
    NOW On February 8, 2011 at 11:30 AM

    Lead 1 is good.

    lead 2 is unexciting

    Lead 3 is odd... They are happy and showing off smiles and yet still tired and worn out? Some conflicting statements.

    Lead 1 is the best

    Daniel

     
    Vinyl Staff On February 8, 2011 at 11:31 AM

    I like your subject! I think the third lead is the most interesting, because it sounds kind of sinister and makes me want to find out more.
    -Claudia

     
    mrs. youngster On February 9, 2011 at 10:32 AM
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    Ezine On February 9, 2011 at 10:34 AM

    The first and third leads are the strongest, but both could be improved a bit. Neither really explains what KPop is, so you may want to refer to it first as "Korean Pop." It would also help to be more specific regarding who these idols are -- maybe you could describe a specific KPop concert to show the reader what the musicians look and sound like; then, you could twist it by explaining the dark side that exists with SM.

     

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